Wayward

Wanderer · Post by **Wanderer** » Mon Sep 26, 2005 12:38 pm

**Currently under revision**

Asha Wermyst · Post by **Asha Wermyst** » Tue Sep 27, 2005 11:21 am

Not too bad, but you need to work on your punctuation especially.

Good spelling, though.

Mystic Dragon · Post by **Mystic Dragon** » Tue Sep 27, 2005 2:04 pm

:D Cool, Wand. I like how you edited in the RP parts. Hopefully we'll be able to continue soon. I've got a plot idea I want to discuss with you.

Shard · Post by **Shard** » Tue Sep 27, 2005 2:33 pm

Yes - excellent. Very nice introduction to the characters. What horrible things we do to our people, huh?

Wanderer · Post by **Wanderer** » Tue Sep 27, 2005 6:31 pm

Asha: Thanks, punctuation is one of my weaknesss with writing along with a few other things. Hopefully I'll do better next time.

Shard: Perhaps, but you should ask Mystic whats all happened to the origional Jonas sometime. Makes this look like a sunday outing.

Mys: Glad you liked it, and can't wait to hear your twis...err novel and thoughtful ideas. Hope to catch you soon once your done moving.